Livora Gracely

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Pip had watched Elowen turn water into bubbles.
Ink was far more suspicious.


That morning, Elowen decided she would learn to write a poem.

Not type one.

Not think one.

Write one properly—with a brush, black ink, and a sheet of white paper large enough to make every mistake look important.

She settled on the bright veranda beside the bonsai, arranged her brushes, and dipped one carefully into the ink.

Pip appeared before the first stroke was finished.

He climbed onto the table and stared.

Elowen drew one dark line.

Pip leaned closer.

Another line crossed it.

Pip raised one eyebrow.

Then came a curve, a hook, and several confident strokes that Pip considered increasingly difficult to defend.

He put one tiny paw beneath his chin.

Elowen noticed him.

“You don’t approve?”

Pip looked at the paper.

Then at the brush.

Then back at Elowen.

She continued writing.

松鼠成诗

Four characters rested in wet black ink.

Pip stepped closer.

He sniffed the first character.

Nothing.

He inspected the second.

Still nothing.

Whatever Elowen was making, it had no scent, could not be eaten, and appeared to have ruined a perfectly good sheet of white paper.

Elowen smiled.

“The squirrel becomes poetry.”

Pip looked behind himself.

No other squirrel.

He looked under the table.

Still none.

Then he slowly turned back toward the paper.

Elowen laughed.

She had spent the morning trying to find something beautiful enough to write about—the bonsai, the sunlight, the flowers moving beyond the veranda.

All the while, her subject had been standing beside her, questioning every brushstroke.

Pip reached toward the paper.

Elowen gently caught his paw before it touched the wet ink.

For a moment they simply looked at each other.

Perhaps poems did not always begin with extraordinary things.

Sometimes something ordinary stayed beside us long enough for us to finally see it.

Elowen added one final stroke.

Pip returned his paw to his chin.

He still did not understand poetry.

But he was beginning to suspect it was about him.

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6 responses to “A Poem in Curious Eyes”

  1. Peter Grey Avatar

    Sweet! And when reading the text became a little cartoon, close up, the writing hand and the squirrel, accompanying every brush stroke with the fitting facial expression, his tiny paw gently being held back just before it touched the wet ink. The smile of the girl. Her soft eyes. The characters refering to themselves.

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    1. Livora Gracely Avatar

      Peter, you brought the whole scene down to squirrel-eye level—the brush moving, Pip’s expressions changing, and that tiny paw being rescued from the wet ink at exactly the right moment. His final suspicion that the poem was about him gives the scene its perfect little turn. Thank you for seeing it so vividly.

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  2. SRIKANTH Avatar

    This is such a quiet, luminous little story. I love how you’ve taken something as simple as a squirrel’s curiosity and turned it into a meditation on attention and art—that the poem isn’t about the bonsai or the sunlight, but about the small, suspicious creature who’s been there all along, questioning every line. The detail of Pip sniffing the characters and finding “nothing” is perfect; it’s so true to how a creature experiences a world that doesn’t revolve around scent or edibility. And that final beat—”he was beginning to suspect it was about him”—lands with just the right amount of warmth and wit. It feels like a modern fable, gently reminding us that the ordinary, when truly seen, becomes the extraordinary. Beautiful work, Livora.

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    1. Livora Gracely Avatar

      Thank you, SRIKANTH. You saw the story from exactly the angle Pip occupied—the brush moving, the ink being inspected for scent or usefulness, and the poem slowly becoming suspiciously personal.

      I’m glad the final turn felt warm rather than explained. Pip does not need to understand poetry for his presence to change what Elowen sees. Sometimes attention begins when the ordinary creature beside us refuses to remain background.

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    1. Livora Gracely Avatar

      Thank you, Anna. I’m glad Pip’s suspicious little inspection brought a smile. His tiny paw and serious expression seemed to have their own opinion about poetry. 🙂

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